Wednesday, November 3, 2010

Mystic Ocean



layered clouds of mist
ride the silver lit ocean
pinwheel colors rise

mystic fall shadows
moonbeams light the changing stars
magic fills the void

14 comments:

uma.a said...

Wonderful poem..I esp.like the end
Magic fills the voids :)

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Thanks uma.a. Glad you liked it.


Melanie

Sumit Sarkar said...

Nice haikus...
I agree with Uma too... :)

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Much thanks Sumit and thanks for following me.


Melanie

Dan Baker said...

Hi, Thank you so much for following my blog and for your kind comments.

These are beautiful words! I too especially like the last line, and also the first two. These three lines in themselves would form their own poem:
"Layered clouds of mist
ride the silver lit ocean,
magic fills the void"
(I hope you don't mind me putting your lines togther like that, please feel free to delete my comments if it offends)

Words I wish I'd come up with myself!

WINDOWLAD said...

...exquisitely clever... i like not only the first, second or the last line but i like every single words you used and painted here... your poems are the real layered clouds of mist that fills our(your readers) emptiness... cheers!!!:)

TC.

~Kelvin

Leo said...

beautiful...nice haikus, Melanie.. its always lovely to see u at HH :)

Catherine Mackie said...

Great haikus. I agree with Dan that you could have created another brilliant one by combining first two and last lines... Well written and visually evocative.

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Dan, we are all here to support and give advice own our poetry. I welcome your comments and your use of my words. It sounds better the way you put it. Thanks very much.


Melanie

Cassiopeia Rises said...

So glad you liked this poem Kevin. I always feel that I am painting with words.Much thanks for your comments.

Melanie

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Much thanks Leo. Glad you liked my work.

Melanie

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Thank you Catherine for reading my KUs. I was in the middle of a thought when I wrote them. As you say I could have woven the words in a different pattern. Glad you liked them.

Melanie

SarahA said...

Sometimes the middle of a thought shows hidden depths.Such a soft feel to this and I love how they are Haiku but not in your face. They just seem natural and not forced.

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Sarah, you are so sweet to come once again to read my Haiku. So glad you liked it.


Melanie