last night I saw heavens lights
low in the southern sky
the milkyway revealed
then a fallen star
shot across an endless fault
trailing colors__ glorious illumination
rainbow of colors
streamed from its tail
pass red Mars__across Saturns moons
a golden color wheel__ stardust
ablaze crisscrossed silent in darkness
filling my longing eyes
14 comments:
filling my longing eyes...
beautifully written :)
This is a beautiful and moving poem. Lovely and stirring imagery here.
Mel, you beautiful words move me as always... email me, please :-)
I love this! The picture is gorgeous, one of my favorites! "stardust ablaze" -takes my breath away!
Wonderful imagery. the words you have used are all my favorites...lights,colors,star,rainbow, stardust....and the flow was magical too.
Thank You for stopping by mine.
This is enchanting and kind of celestial..pretty piece here-
To be so satisfied. Gorgeous poem.
Stunning, stunning!
Melanie, isn't it wonderful to have those lights in the heavens! And you portrayed them so truthfully and beautifully.
I've seen the first three. Every time I am in awe.
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What a stunning poem! I especially love "stardust ablaze!" What a fantastic image that paints!
beautiful poem!
love the image potrayed!
a very beautiful poem! well done!
Love this!!!
Hello Melanie. Beautiful piece. So imaginative and fantastical. Thank you for your kindness and effort to visit my blog. I liked the way you tnansformed my haiku into a contemporary one. It's much simple and the thought was still there. I've already read a lot of contemporary haikus before and yes it gives the writer more freedom and simplicity of thoughts, but i think i'm gonna stick with what i'm more familiar with although i really appreciate your appreciation and encouragement to share me another way of writing a haiku. Thank you for your frienship and kindness. I enjoyed the read.
>>God bless you and your family. Have a good day!!!:)
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