rises with the moon
sets with the sun
weaving patterns of love.....
deep purple, violet blue,red
hearts burn hot in the night
bodies move under the stars
in slow rhythm with the universe
mornings slick dew, shimmers with stars light
shadows now follow all......
gone the nights heat and desire
gone the power and image of love
we are all chained for life......
a sentence without a chance of parole
hidden from the days light, waiting for dark
22 comments:
Wow!
'we are all chained for life......
a sentence without a chance of parole
hidden from the days light, waiting for dark'
Passion in waiting... so beautifully described.
Thank you Harshad. I am so glad you liked it.
Melanie
An incredible poem. Shall we post this to the OSI homepage Sunday? Let me know.
My first visit and I am so happy that I did.. Oh! You write so beautiful.. I liked the way you have weaved the poem even if the ending is a bit sad..
Dear Melanie,
The vivid contrast between the two stanzas of the passion of love vs its departure is so skillfully rendered by you that I'm literally shaking and tearing up. Your poem is that visceral. A majority of your fine poems affect me that way.
Hugs,
Gel
vampires, children of the night, wolves
beauty in the darkness
love this piece
Sandy post whatever you feel is right....
Melamie
incredible poem, full of color, depth and wisdom. Thank you for a wonderful prompt.
Hi!
I'm a newbie here and what a discovery! Enjoyed every word of your beautiful poem. Delighted! Thank you.
Melanie, thanks for the prompt - your words are always so full of life and its complexities - always provocative and profound.
Thanks for the prompt, and this wonderful poem. The wordplay, imagery and contrast make it a memorable read.
Thank you for the prompt and your wonderful poem. So full of passion and desire. Are we truly chained for life?
An interesting way to turn that around, and great use of words!
what love can be? seems to act in sync with nature, the rising and the setting of sun, that bright moon and stars above as mute witnesses...:)
beautiful thoughts indeed melanie!
Beautiful, passionate, and real...lovely poem!
Thank all, for your kind comments. I am happy that you liked it.
And you too Gel makes it worthwile
Melanie.
You being the initiater of the prompt,I invite you to my page..for your feedback..
Passionate and beautiful poem. The imagery is amazing. What an amazing take on love. Thanks for the inspiration here Melanie :)
Is love desirable? Is it not? I think it's "...better to have loved and lost than not loved at all."
Thanks for the thought-provoking verses.
Best regards.
Thank you Melanie! Thank you for this neat little four-letter prompt that is so hard to write.
Thank you too for your rendition. I loved the first verse and got terribly sad with the second.
I've been both places and don't want the second ever again. The life is tolerable and more exciting but the chain breaking is Hell! Even if I was almost forever wanting it that way it was still tough to go through.
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Living for love and the heat of the night. Hard to reconcile with the glare of morning. A thought provoking poem.
Thanks for the prompt--am enjoying all that it has inspired!
This sounds like a secret love, or passion masking as love. Sometimes it is hard to tell!
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