a river overflowing
it's raw jagged banks
tears pool here and there
as winters frozen snow melts
pale blood left behind
gone his loving care
gone his quiet gentle smile
gone his words of love
empty is my heart
cold my skin has now become
numb my world grows dim
my floating body
caught in a whirlpool of ice
soon sinks from all time
36 comments:
The desolating and overwhelming feelings of a lost love - well captured. I like the image with it as well!
Thanks becca. Glad you liked it. I am in a kind of blue mood these days.
Melanie
This is lovely. I especially liked:
tears pool here and there
showing how sadness can collect in places.
Beautifully written.
Delicious poem with fine romantic roots.
Oowee, Melany ~~ This one has a surprise ending and YOU lulled me into it. I knew it was going to be sad but not to the death. ;)
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BTW, of the seven posts I have read, four sequed from 'river' to 'love.' Equal, two from each sex (includes mine).
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Past melancholy to exquisitely sad.
Your pen proved magical.
romantic beautiful words!
I am sorry you are in a blue mood. I have known those. They put the muse on a bitter diet, but they are not forever. Beautiful poem.
A sad love poem but it is so stunning. It's wonderful to capture all the emotions that you are feeling sometimes. I certainly hope you are feeling better Melanie :)
It did end a bit sadly and the picture is so apt for the softly flowing words you have woven!! The third verse shows great yearning of the empty heart!!
Oh, feelings so well rendered. You are too good at it.
I hope the gloom in your heart lifts soon. Beautiful poem!
Throes of sadness for the warmth of someone dear but not around nearby. Many may relate to this at one time or the other. Excellent write!
Hank
Your feelings flowed like a river... very touching and heartfelt..may you continue to share not only to keel light but be the light for so many others..
Thanks mareymercy. Yes sadness never seems to dry up. Thanks for reading my poem.
Melanie
Thank you Anthony. I ham glad you liked it.
Melanie
Much thanks Leovi. Glad you like my poem.
Melanie
My friend Jim, we all seemed to think of love as being a river in our lives and so it is.
Melanie
Cynthia, sadness seems to be my thing. I do it very well. Thanks for stopping by.
Melanie
Glad you liked it Sandra.
Melanie
Sandy, seem mine has been around forever. Here's hoping. Glad you like my Haiku.
Melanie
Not yet not yet my friend but I am working on it.
Melanie
Thanks Nanka. That's me, empty of what should be in my heart. Someone took it away. But that's life.
Melanie
Yes my friend, I do sadness very well.
Melanie
Hazel, thank you. I do too.
Melanie
Thank you my friend. Glad you liked my work.
Melanie
Thank you my friend for your kind words.
Melanie
this so reminds me of shakespeares ophelia... you have truly captured as i would have imagined her heart, soul and body drowning..
Losing love is so traumatic. The desolation comes through your words. Well done.
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